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Pale Moonlight ([identity profile] pale-moonlite.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] tamela_j 2010-10-16 09:42 pm (UTC)

This is a very moving story. With "Bob" and Drew, you've created two wonderfully real, three-dimensional characters. I especially loved the way you showed Jake's depression, and his way out of it. It's a long way from the weltschmerz of a fifteen-year-old to his understanding of lyrics and music in the final part, and I loved to follow him there. And I loved the twist:

Of course it was Drew. It always had been; even when he hadn't taken the time to see the man, he had heard him and his music. His subconscious telling the story, reliving the memories that his conscious mind had been too self absorbed to put together.

Beautiful story!

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